‘Civilization’s traps’

Closed doors

Front doors

Eyes close

Eyes closed

Careful watch

Watch to catch

You doing something wrong

.

Hands reach

Hands of witch

And tongues of one too

Tongues always due

To see you do

Change the hue

.

Nails sharp

Nails that carp

Just like lips

Making you get to grips

With remorse

Which only makes things worse

.

Ears that listen

In the light they glisten

The foes that gossip

Wait for you to take a sip

From the cup which pleasures promise

But no friends enlist

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Hey, readers! It’s my 100th post!!! Yay! Time to celebrate…

Champagne tower.

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I’d like to thank you for the following award in the Thursday Poets Rally:

I nominate Elaine Danforth.

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About Magdalena

I'm a positive thinker, a dreamer, a poet, a dancer, a writer. I want to empower people and inspire them to follow their dreams and create their lives exactly the way they wish them to be :)

Posted on June 15, 2011, in Poems, Uncategorized and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 55 Comments.

  1. fabulous! unique and wonderful. this is my kinda stuff.

  2. a smooth flow and an endearing rhyming … loved it.

  3. Stupendous! You wrote poetry like the way it comes at times.. each word in itself complete! wow!

    I am ~ http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/i-me-the-butterfly/

  4. Very true..and nicely penned down…
    And hey congrats on your 100th post πŸ™‚

    Alcina

  5. nice tight and pithy, they r out there!
    thank you πŸ™‚

  6. Enjoyed this – has a kind of urgency to it somehow, I suppose because of all the short lines and thoughts flowing.

  7. Congratulations on your 100th post…may you pen many more!

    Nicely penned poem today.

  8. Congratulation of your 100th. post
    Well written…
    I especially enjoyed the last 6 lines.
    Genebrother

  9. Heyy nice 1 … Great take
    Anyways, Here’s mine stuff !!!
    http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/06/13/i-remember/
    Happy Rally !!! XD

  10. love the presentation and stark images πŸ™‚

  11. playful words, love the wisdom behind.
    cheers.
    Happy Rally.

  12. amazingly fun to read!!! it was like i was back in school!! πŸ™‚ loved it…

    and congratulations for the centenary post… πŸ™‚

  13. wow!!!! congrats on the 100th post!! πŸ˜€

    loved the poem πŸ™‚

  14. Very nice rhyme and word combinations. Really enjoyed Thanks:)

  15. Congrats on meeting your posting milestone!! Great piece of work here!

  16. celebrating with you! I enjoyed reading the poem πŸ™‚

  17. sweet..
    Way to go pal..
    congrats….

  18. Congrats on your 100th post! I love the ambiance of your poem and the rhythm its really beautiful and it makes me want to write so inspiring too!

  19. I like the first verse by itself – completely stands alone and speaks volumes!

  20. congrats on you hundreth post…..i also added my hundreth post last week..

    i liked this poem you wrote, its very diverse in a way that it flows and it tells you a story btwn the lines.amzing as always.

    my link:http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/06/forever-almost.html

  21. Very much like a nursery rhyme, i like the catchyness of it

  22. Congrats to you! Enjoyed the poem, now lets see if this posts.

  23. I understand this environment quite well. This gave me a chill.

  24. Congrats! Loved the poem. Enjoyed the staccato effect.
    Old Raven http://crowsfete.blogspot.com/

  25. This sent chills up my spine!
    Very chilling, but beautiful work!

  26. Civilization traps you in the dillusion of progress πŸ™‚

  27. The second stanza is my favorite…keep up the good work.

  28. A poem that drew me in instantly, and kept me there, right to the last line, with curiosity to look a little closer. I puzzled over that last line a while, “No friends enlist.” I think I may get it now– that the friends won’t play this game against a person, which seems to me to offer hope that one is not without allies in this field of “Civilization’s Traps”.

    The images your poem almost seems to pause on, like a lingering camera shot in a movie, work really well for me, especially the tongues that reach and the glistening ears.

    A very fitting poem for your 100th post. Congratulations on that milestone!

    • Thank you! I’m really glad you’ve taken the time to analyze my poem so insightfully. As it comes to the last line, it’s supposed to match the previous. I’ve meant that very often we are offered moment pleasures, and we trap ourselves in them just to find ourselves lonely and unhappy when it’s already too late… But as I always say – any interpretation is correct πŸ˜‰

  29. Congrats on the 100th post and very cool write

  30. Congratulations on 100 posts!!

    Love your prose writing style!
    Thanks for visiting my blog and the lovely comment too!

  31. Contratulations on 100 postings and may there be many more. πŸ™‚

  32. what a lovely nomination,
    well deserved award.
    πŸ˜‰

  33. Very sweet words, and the images are quite complex despite the simplicity (good simplicity πŸ™‚ ), very smooth πŸ˜‰ Congrats on your 100th post!

  34. Very happy and catchy. Thank you!

  35. Great poem Magda–I like what you have to say here. Congratulations on your 100th post and for your rally award too! Yay for you!

  36. love the flow πŸ™‚

  37. Madher1,
    It was my pleasure to read your poem closely and comment. Thanks for your explanation of how the last line fits in, and thank you very much for the nomination.
    Elaine

  38. Beautifully written, the poem felt like a little kid doing something they not suppose to be doing behind their parent’s back.

    http://mrblaque78.wordpress.com/2011/06/02/poetry-knight/

  39. Love it. πŸ™‚

  40. Brilliant structure and rhyme. love the style.

  41. Congrats on your 100th post … quite a feat! Enjoyable penned post as well!

  42. Congratulations on the milestone πŸ™‚ Well deserved. I love how your first four or six lines are quite similar, but a word or a tense changes the effect so much! Nicely written!

  43. Doors, hands, nails, ears… Sounds like some horror story! πŸ™‚ Congratulations!

  44. Nice word play, very catchy and refreshing!

  45. Congratulations on your 100th post.
    I really enjoyed the rhythm of this piece. It flows quite quickly off the tounge. The images you’ve chosen create a sharp and concise reflection of ‘civiliziation’. I enjoyed reading this and the pause for thought it provoked.

  46. Congratulation for 100th post.

  47. Good stuff! And woo-hoo on the 100th post. Did you drink all that champagne? πŸ˜‰

  48. Hello,
    congratulations on your 100th post. Great poem too, most enjoyable πŸ™‚

  49. Congrats for the award and the 100th post, keep the great words coming Magdalena… As for the poem you’ve got it right my dear friend…:-)

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