‘The Vision’

Burning sun

Falling down the stairs

Slowly, gradually


Rivers of blood

Red and black

Flowing right with it


The vision changes

I’m in the sand

Blue sand


Out of blue sand

There come manlike creatures

Surrounding me, disintegrating me


Green grass

Is falling

From the orange sky


Sky in flames

Hanging chains

Welcoming me


Rivers, shivers,

Hues, images

Now find the meaning



About Magdalena

I'm a positive thinker, a dreamer, a poet, a dancer, a writer. I want to empower people and inspire them to follow their dreams and create their lives exactly the way they wish them to be :)

Posted on December 12, 2011, in Poems and tagged , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 35 Comments.

  1. What a colorful and enchanting vision! Lovely and mysterious…

  2. wow– the flow of images is mesmerizing!

  3. Very cool images you created with this poem! Awesome!
    Visiting from the ‘Thursday Poets Rally Week 58’.
    Kevin Routh (http://kevinrouthpoetry.blogspot.com/)

  4. It’s so Dali – like, with the various images coming and going, disturbing and haunting and also compelling you to read it again! Well done! Here’s mine this week: http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2011/12/09/drafting-personal-census/ Happy rally!

  5. Psychedelic Visions of dreamlike phantasmagoria, from a burning sun to hanging chains from a sky in flames…fire.
    the piece begins and ends with allusions to fire.

    there’s an unsettling manner in tone, yet the images are appealingly interesting.
    it would be surreal, but then human-like figures are introduced, so it’s beyond surrealism (as it was originally defined).

    so many primary colors are imbued…this is almost a painting piece…

    very interesting. I enjoyed this poem.

  6. very evocative, vivid and powerful, great impact!

  7. look at an interesting shape in the sky and find the meaning


  8. “find the meaning….”

    Well my ‘shot at it’ … is the poem speaks to me about personal loss or death …. it’s an awesome way to write about it 🙂 The images are extremely striking. I do have to read this piece several times….

    Nicely done!

  9. It might be a good idea to give the acid a miss 😉
    Psychedelic in the extreme. Green grass and orange skies did evoke some old memories though.
    Enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing.

  10. Nice imagery! Evokes the imagination. Blessings, Terri

  11. I love the structure–tercets. You write using short lines which always creates a sense of tension. I find this write clever. Good work.

  12. Floating on a tapestry of colors that awaken the mind.
    Mark Butkus

  13. What an intense and hue saturated piece. I really like it! I, loved the contrast between the beauty of the colours and the unsettling quality of the words. Very nice!

  14. I particularly liked the colors and color shifts.

  15. very colorful read! your blog template the flow of your poem….thanks for sharing…

  16. Nice work and the picture really compliments your words

  17. I really like this because I often have dreams that I can’t decipher.

  18. Mix of colours brushed with a fine toothed comb, arrayed in fine lines

  19. sounds like the apocalypse. cool writing. 🙂

  20. lovely word flow.

    Thanks for sharing.

  21. That image is remarkable. Your words completely brought it to life with a haunting resonance. Nice pen! Happy Rally!


  22. What a captivating piece! Thank you for sharing! It spoke to me in so many ways. It was a small journey.
    Erick Flores

  23. beautiful poem and the imagery matches it perfectly:)

  24. Great poem 😉

  25. You have painted such great visuals with this piece!

  26. Lovely imagery! enjoyed the read..

  27. fascinating use of colours.fiery, contrasting, now uniting, then departing.

  28. My, my… your poetry has really taken me in. You have a new fan… You are very talented… I really like the way you write!

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