‘The Vision’
Burning sun
Falling down the stairs
Slowly, gradually
Rivers of blood
Red and black
Flowing right with it
The vision changes
I’m in the sand
Blue sand
Out of blue sand
There come manlike creatures
Surrounding me, disintegrating me
Green grass
Is falling
From the orange sky
Sky in flames
Hanging chains
Welcoming me
Rivers, shivers,
Hues, images
Now find the meaning
Posted on December 12, 2011, in Poems and tagged abstraction, creative writing, dream, dreams, Poems, poetry, vision. Bookmark the permalink. 35 Comments.
The Chamber of Stories 
What a colorful and enchanting vision! Lovely and mysterious…
wow– the flow of images is mesmerizing!
Very cool images you created with this poem! Awesome!
Visiting from the ‘Thursday Poets Rally Week 58’.
Thanks!
Kevin Routh (http://kevinrouthpoetry.blogspot.com/)
It’s so Dali – like, with the various images coming and going, disturbing and haunting and also compelling you to read it again! Well done! Here’s mine this week: http://caridwen.wordpress.com/2011/12/09/drafting-personal-census/ Happy rally!
Psychedelic Visions of dreamlike phantasmagoria, from a burning sun to hanging chains from a sky in flames…fire.
the piece begins and ends with allusions to fire.
there’s an unsettling manner in tone, yet the images are appealingly interesting.
it would be surreal, but then human-like figures are introduced, so it’s beyond surrealism (as it was originally defined).
so many primary colors are imbued…this is almost a painting piece…
very interesting. I enjoyed this poem.
very evocative, vivid and powerful, great impact!
a kadeleiscope 🙂 interesting, intriguing, happy rally!!!
http://lynnaima.wordpress.com/2011/12/14/discomfort/
look at an interesting shape in the sky and find the meaning
“find the meaning….”
Well my ‘shot at it’ … is the poem speaks to me about personal loss or death …. it’s an awesome way to write about it 🙂 The images are extremely striking. I do have to read this piece several times….
Nicely done!
It might be a good idea to give the acid a miss 😉
Psychedelic in the extreme. Green grass and orange skies did evoke some old memories though.
Enjoyed reading, thanks for sharing.
Nice imagery! Evokes the imagination. Blessings, Terri
I love the structure–tercets. You write using short lines which always creates a sense of tension. I find this write clever. Good work.
Floating on a tapestry of colors that awaken the mind.
Cheers,
Mark Butkus
Awesome write, and the picture really adds to the post. Nicely done!
What an intense and hue saturated piece. I really like it! I, loved the contrast between the beauty of the colours and the unsettling quality of the words. Very nice!
I particularly liked the colors and color shifts.
very colorful read! your blog template the flow of your poem….thanks for sharing…
Nice work and the picture really compliments your words
I really like this because I often have dreams that I can’t decipher.
Mix of colours brushed with a fine toothed comb, arrayed in fine lines
mezmerizing words…
Wonderfully psychedelic, and I love the last line.
http://halfwaybetweenthegutter.wordpress.com/2011/05/16/late-night-cafe/
mesmerizing color shifts,
loved it
http://bupinder21.wordpress.com/2011/12/12/puppets/
sounds like the apocalypse. cool writing. 🙂
lovely word flow.
Thanks for sharing.
That image is remarkable. Your words completely brought it to life with a haunting resonance. Nice pen! Happy Rally!
http://magicinthebackyard.wordpress.com/2011/12/15/on-the-dock-where-summer-lied/
What a captivating piece! Thank you for sharing! It spoke to me in so many ways. It was a small journey.
Erick Flores
beautiful poem and the imagery matches it perfectly:)
Yikes!
Great poem 😉
You have painted such great visuals with this piece!
Lovely imagery! enjoyed the read..
fascinating use of colours.fiery, contrasting, now uniting, then departing.
My, my… your poetry has really taken me in. You have a new fan… You are very talented… I really like the way you write!
Thank you so much, you’re so kind! People like you encourage me to write even more 😉