‘Civilization’s traps’

Jun 15

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Closed doors

Front doors

Eyes close

Eyes closed

Careful watch

Watch to catch

You doing something wrong

.

Hands reach

Hands of witch

And tongues of one too

Tongues always due

To see you do

Change the hue

.

Nails sharp

Nails that carp

Just like lips

Making you get to grips

With remorse

Which only makes things worse

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Ears that listen

In the light they glisten

The foes that gossip

Wait for you to take a sip

From the cup which pleasures promise

But no friends enlist

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Hey, readers! It’s my 100th post!!! Yay! Time to celebrate…

Champagne tower.

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I’d like to thank you for the following award in the Thursday Poets Rally:

I nominate Elaine Danforth.

About Magdalena

I'm a positive thinker, a dreamer, a poet, a dancer, a writer. I want to empower people and inspire them to follow their dreams and create their lives exactly the way they wish them to be :) Check out my YouTube channel at https://www.youtube.com/channel/UCNXQ03QibdGEy2hY3xQeldg

Posted on June 15, 2011, in Poems, Uncategorized and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. 55 Comments.

  1. a.m. trumble | June 15, 2011 at 4:38 pm

    fabulous! unique and wonderful. this is my kinda stuff.

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  2. Baishali | June 15, 2011 at 4:39 pm

    a smooth flow and an endearing rhyming … loved it.

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  4. Purvi | June 15, 2011 at 5:12 pm

    Stupendous! You wrote poetry like the way it comes at times.. each word in itself complete! wow!

    I am ~ http://puplumages.wordpress.com/2011/06/03/i-me-the-butterfly/

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  5. Alcina | June 15, 2011 at 6:24 pm

    Very true..and nicely penned down…
    And hey congrats on your 100th post đŸ™‚

    Alcina

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  6. Paul | June 15, 2011 at 6:47 pm

    nice tight and pithy, they r out there!
    thank you đŸ™‚

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  7. poemsaboutpeas | June 15, 2011 at 7:00 pm

    Enjoyed this – has a kind of urgency to it somehow, I suppose because of all the short lines and thoughts flowing.

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  8. Andy | June 15, 2011 at 7:31 pm

    Congratulations on your 100th post…may you pen many more!

    Nicely penned poem today.

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  9. Genebrother | June 15, 2011 at 8:02 pm

    Congratulation of your 100th. post
    Well written…
    I especially enjoyed the last 6 lines.
    Genebrother

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  10. ashbeezone | June 15, 2011 at 8:47 pm

    Heyy nice 1 … Great take
    Anyways, Here’s mine stuff !!!
    http://ashbeezone.wordpress.com/2011/06/13/i-remember/
    Happy Rally !!! XD

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  11. 15homegreenhome | June 15, 2011 at 10:19 pm

    love the presentation and stark images đŸ™‚

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  12. Jingle | June 16, 2011 at 3:07 am

    playful words, love the wisdom behind.
    cheers.
    Happy Rally.

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  14. Piyush | June 16, 2011 at 8:08 am

    amazingly fun to read!!! it was like i was back in school!! đŸ™‚ loved it…

    and congratulations for the centenary post… đŸ™‚

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  15. dancingfreak | June 16, 2011 at 4:37 pm

    wow!!!! congrats on the 100th post!! đŸ˜€

    loved the poem đŸ™‚

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  16. Fred | June 16, 2011 at 5:54 pm

    Very nice rhyme and word combinations. Really enjoyed Thanks:)

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  17. thoughtsnotlost | June 16, 2011 at 11:04 pm

    Congrats on meeting your posting milestone!! Great piece of work here!

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  18. bendedspoon | June 17, 2011 at 2:15 am

    celebrating with you! I enjoyed reading the poem đŸ™‚

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  19. Dakshi | June 17, 2011 at 3:22 am

    sweet..
    Way to go pal..
    congrats….

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  20. mindlovemisery | June 17, 2011 at 6:18 am

    Congrats on your 100th post! I love the ambiance of your poem and the rhythm its really beautiful and it makes me want to write so inspiring too!

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  21. Peggy Nolan | June 17, 2011 at 9:09 am

    I like the first verse by itself – completely stands alone and speaks volumes!

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  22. Chimnese | June 17, 2011 at 10:28 am

    congrats on you hundreth post…..i also added my hundreth post last week..

    i liked this poem you wrote, its very diverse in a way that it flows and it tells you a story btwn the lines.amzing as always.

    my link:http://mypoetrywriting.blogspot.com/2011/06/forever-almost.html

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  24. crayfish | June 17, 2011 at 2:51 pm

    Very much like a nursery rhyme, i like the catchyness of it

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  25. Liz Rice-Sosne | June 17, 2011 at 6:58 pm

    Congrats to you! Enjoyed the poem, now lets see if this posts.

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  26. Kim Nelson | June 17, 2011 at 6:58 pm

    I understand this environment quite well. This gave me a chill.

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  27. lizrs66 | June 17, 2011 at 7:37 pm

    Congrats! Loved the poem. Enjoyed the staccato effect.
    Old Raven http://crowsfete.blogspot.com/

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  28. aynsley7 | June 18, 2011 at 12:01 am

    This sent chills up my spine!
    Very chilling, but beautiful work!

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  29. Vinod Narayan | June 18, 2011 at 12:22 am

    Civilization traps you in the dillusion of progress đŸ™‚

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  30. Miriam Sagan | June 18, 2011 at 2:44 am

    The second stanza is my favorite…keep up the good work.

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  31. elainedanforth | June 18, 2011 at 4:51 am

    A poem that drew me in instantly, and kept me there, right to the last line, with curiosity to look a little closer. I puzzled over that last line a while, “No friends enlist.” I think I may get it now– that the friends won’t play this game against a person, which seems to me to offer hope that one is not without allies in this field of “Civilization’s Traps”.

    The images your poem almost seems to pause on, like a lingering camera shot in a movie, work really well for me, especially the tongues that reach and the glistening ears.

    A very fitting poem for your 100th post. Congratulations on that milestone!

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    • magher1 | June 18, 2011 at 1:02 pm

      Thank you! I’m really glad you’ve taken the time to analyze my poem so insightfully. As it comes to the last line, it’s supposed to match the previous. I’ve meant that very often we are offered moment pleasures, and we trap ourselves in them just to find ourselves lonely and unhappy when it’s already too late… But as I always say – any interpretation is correct đŸ˜‰

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  32. A.B. Thomas | June 18, 2011 at 2:46 pm

    Congrats on the 100th post and very cool write

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  33. Daydreamertoo | June 18, 2011 at 2:50 pm

    Congratulations on 100 posts!!

    Love your prose writing style!
    Thanks for visiting my blog and the lovely comment too!

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  34. Ina | June 18, 2011 at 4:19 pm

    Contratulations on 100 postings and may there be many more. đŸ™‚

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  35. Jingle | June 18, 2011 at 4:56 pm

    what a lovely nomination,
    well deserved award.
    đŸ˜‰

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  36. Leonargo | June 18, 2011 at 5:47 pm

    Very sweet words, and the images are quite complex despite the simplicity (good simplicity đŸ™‚ ), very smooth đŸ˜‰ Congrats on your 100th post!

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  37. trust1000 | June 18, 2011 at 9:26 pm

    Very happy and catchy. Thank you!

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  38. Bodhirose | June 18, 2011 at 11:14 pm

    Great poem Magda–I like what you have to say here. Congratulations on your 100th post and for your rally award too! Yay for you!

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  39. swanrose | June 19, 2011 at 12:01 am

    love the flow đŸ™‚

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  40. elainedanforth | June 19, 2011 at 12:09 am

    Madher1,
    It was my pleasure to read your poem closely and comment. Thanks for your explanation of how the last line fits in, and thank you very much for the nomination.
    Elaine

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  41. Mr Blaque | June 19, 2011 at 1:32 am

    Beautifully written, the poem felt like a little kid doing something they not suppose to be doing behind their parent’s back.

    Poetry Knight

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  42. D | June 19, 2011 at 1:29 pm

    Love it. đŸ™‚

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  43. Jack Edwards | June 19, 2011 at 2:19 pm

    Brilliant structure and rhyme. love the style.

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  44. Becca Givens | June 19, 2011 at 4:36 pm

    Congrats on your 100th post … quite a feat! Enjoyable penned post as well!

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  45. Leo | June 19, 2011 at 7:08 pm

    Congratulations on the milestone đŸ™‚ Well deserved. I love how your first four or six lines are quite similar, but a word or a tense changes the effect so much! Nicely written!

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  46. seabell | June 19, 2011 at 7:22 pm

    Doors, hands, nails, ears… Sounds like some horror story! đŸ™‚ Congratulations!

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  47. ALIVE aLwaYs | June 19, 2011 at 7:40 pm

    Nice word play, very catchy and refreshing!

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  48. tikarmavodicka | June 20, 2011 at 1:13 am

    Congratulations on your 100th post.
    I really enjoyed the rhythm of this piece. It flows quite quickly off the tounge. The images you’ve chosen create a sharp and concise reflection of ‘civiliziation’. I enjoyed reading this and the pause for thought it provoked.

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  49. meiro | June 20, 2011 at 7:57 am

    Congratulation for 100th post.

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  50. Becky | June 21, 2011 at 10:57 pm

    Good stuff! And woo-hoo on the 100th post. Did you drink all that champagne? đŸ˜‰

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  51. Jeanie McBain | June 22, 2011 at 7:02 pm

    Hello,
    congratulations on your 100th post. Great poem too, most enjoyable đŸ™‚

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  52. Sam | June 23, 2011 at 7:03 am

    Congrats for the award and the 100th post, keep the great words coming Magdalena… As for the poem you’ve got it right my dear friend…:-)

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